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can't you read anything more than 3 lines? read and reply ffs.


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Hehe I read it, but didn't really know what to say so I didn't post. But if you insist... rolleyes.gif

Nice story. This seems like just a scene or maybe a small chapter from a book. Maybe you should expand upon it wink.gif

Und ich habe ein Fehler gefunden, glaube ich:

"Ray remembers fancying since the first day of high school. "


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einen Fehler...

yeah it's just a typo.


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Thats kinda long...


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QUOTE(Lies of Silence @ Jun 24 2007, 21:30 ) *
einen Fehler...
Ah, Akkusativ right? Shame on me tongue.gif


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QUOTE(Pvt. Blackhawk @ Jun 25 2007, 05:06 ) *

Thats kinda long...

Whatever, it's not even 750 words. sleep.gif


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Firefox won't let me download it? blink.gif


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Raymond sighs while looking at the picture taken at the high school summer camp, way back in the 90s, just after the fall of the USSR.
It must have been very early into the decade, because in the background of the freshly graduated students, the watchtowers and the remains of the Iron Curtain were still visible.

Has it been 15 years already since he was in West-Germany?
He sighs again. He looks at the third row, sixth girl from left. Her then modern flannel shirt with ripped jeans makes her stand out from the neon 80s clothing, worn by the rest of the group. It’s been 10 years already since Amy killed herself.

Today would have been her 30th birthday. Ray remembers fancying since the first day of high school. In the five years that followed, he had been constantly trying to get a relationship with her. At first it hadn’t been very serious, but say that to a 12 year old!
One year, they hadn’t been in the same class because Ray had pretty low grades and he had to do the third year two times.

Everyone could go to the summer camp, but except the freshly graduated students, no one cared. The fourth-years weren’t allowed to drink alcohol yet, so when the other fifth years were having a party with all kinds of alcoholic drinks, the fourth years were sitting in a corner with a soft drink.
But because of the fact that Ray had the age of a fifth year student, an exception had been made. Of course he had just taken the trip from the UK to West-Germany just to be with Amy for a week, after that, he wouldn’t see her again. He knew that back then, but that it would be that bad, no one could predict.

In 1991, the year she got out of school, Ray was still in love with her and the last day of the course year ’90-’91 he had hoped to make out with her, finally. But instead of falling in his arms, she just got on the school bus, using Valspeak with her friends as she went.

After that, she was never heard from again until he saw her funeral announced in the Daily Paper:
Amy Maprell,
*August 3, 1976 - † January 30, 1996.
Funeral to be held February 17, 1996.

That day nobody showed up at the funeral, not even her Valspeak school friends. Ray thought it was pretty weird, because she was really popular in high school. The five years between her death and her graduation, she had been battling a drug and alcohol addiction. Ray lights a cigarette and wonders if that already had happened during her high school years. Suddenly he remembers her wearing long sleeves at any given time at school, even in the midst of summer. That must have meant she was already destructing herself. The radio that had been on in Ray’s bedroom suddenly starts playing Amy’s favourite song: Down in a Hole by Alice in Chains. He takes a drag and remembers her being deep into that band and almost going through the roof in excitement when she finally got to see them. Ironically, the line “I'd like to fly but my wings have been so denied” was exactly the way she killed herself: Jumping from the top floor from her apartment building into the busy highway 103. That day, the early morning of January 30, 1996, Highway 103 had been busy as ever so that she was dead on impact. Ray doesn’t know any more than that she had taken all kinds of drugs, as police later found a bong, a vaporizer, bleach, a few syringes and something to sniff coke from. No suicide note or will had been found and the rent was three months due. Her room was a terrible mess and no one knew where she was the last few months of her life. No money was found and she was unemployed, so almost immediately people started suggesting she had been working as a prostitute.

He lights up a Camel and stares at the picture in front of him. Ten years. He gets his lighter from the table and lights the two candles next to her picture.

After all those years, he hadn’t forgotten her. He finishes his liquor and takes a big drag. He almost starts crying when he gets ready for bed. He sighs again.


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I think it's pretty well written, sounds like a true story. I hope it isn't though. Nice one LoS.


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Detail....


I have written a lot of stories, 90% on which I never expanded.


I hope you continue to work on this.




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I suppose the time for words are now.

Beakening the words for Silent Sound.

Stand here and wait, and see.

For the vision is gray with me.

Stand here, and see what I know.

Or been gone and go.


See what is seen.

Known to be keen.

There is rise to the ground.

Silent_Sound.
 
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But then it wouldnt be a short story.


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Good story nice job LoS. thumbsup.gif
 
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