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  Post#1 | Sep 22 2007, 20:41 + Quote Post Go to the top of the page
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I have been really bored the last week, so I did a thing that I havn't do for ages. Writing poems.


Money can't buy life
So close your purse
Think about it and enjoy your wife
Or you might end up with a nurse


Started that one with a quote from Bob Marley.


We don't know everything
Even if we think so
Cause there will always be a last thing
And then everybody says no


Just maked that one in a few minutes. It like come with.

We always have hope.
Even if sometimes it's hard to find.
Your legs feel like soap.
But looking for it in your mind.


Honestly the soap dosn't really fit in. I will change it soon.

You continue the fight.
Holding a flame in you hand.
It's flashing like a big Light.
But suddenly it converts to sand.

And you are in the middle of the Night.
So you lose the war and your land.
But still you think you fight for the right.
So your soldiers stands together tight.

And waiting for you to lead them to victory.


My longest free verse in english so far.


What do you think? Am I good or do I suck?

This post has been edited by Golden Gun: Sep 23 2007, 10:56


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Pass. Im not really into poetry. Good to see you made it rhyme.


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Well there are a few good parts here and there, but a lot of really sucky ones too tongue.gif

And atleast get your spelling right if you post poetry! But here's some kudos anyway, just because you posted poetry. That's something we don't see here a lot.


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QUOTE(Nico @ Sep 23 2007, 10:21 ) *

Well there are a few good parts here and there, but a lot of really sucky ones too tongue.gif

And atleast get your spelling right if you post poetry! But here's some kudos anyway, just because you posted poetry. That's something we don't see here a lot.



I run them thu a spell check, And hopefully evrything is correct now. I usually prefer to not use some spellcheck on them, Cause it makes me feel that my english isn't good enough tongue.gif



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Too short. But coming from a guy who liked the Odessey and wrote one just as long. I can't really say...

Here's the cold hard facts
"I write Poetry for a 2nd language I have some published and right now I'm getting a book ready for the store shelfs. So, really you need more feeling, more you. If you can read a peom and understand it. Then it's a part of you. Can you really look at someone and know all there is to know about him/her? No."


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I suppose the time for words are now.

Beakening the words for Silent Sound.

Stand here and wait, and see.

For the vision is gray with me.

Stand here, and see what I know.

Or been gone and go.


See what is seen.

Known to be keen.

There is rise to the ground.

Silent_Sound.
 
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I got some Christian poetry...


Upon the shore, I walked with Him at even
And I looked back upon the path wed trod
And in the sand I traced our way at even
And I was glad Id walked through life with God:
For side by side wed journeyed through together
All through the worlds wide wilderness of care
And side by side wed journeyed through to even:
Safe at his side the Lord my God had brought me here.

But in my joy I caught a strain of sadness
To give me pause when thinking of my way
For on the shore I saw hed left me lonely
When I had most the need of him to stay:
When I was tried hed left me worn and wandering,
Hed left me lone when I was fighting fears,
Hed let me tread the steepest slopes in solitude
Before he came back to my side to dry my tears.

But then the Lord drew near to me in comfort
And in his tenderness he made it plain
That in the times when dread and darkness threatened
He was my shield and shelter from the pain:
For on his shoulders he was gently bearing
And on his shoulders I from harm was free:
The single trace of footprints of the Master,
The single trace of footprints shows he carried me.

So on the shore I walk with Him at even;
I face the latter days of life secure,
For if my pilgrimage reserves me sorrow
The footprints show that He is strong and sure:
If I am near the gates of heaven weary,
No longer strong enough to stride alone
The footprints show that he is there to carry me:
The footprints show the Lord my God will bear me home

-Margaret Fishback Powers


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QUOTE(badass @ Oct 17 2007, 23:12 ) *

I got some Christian poetry...
Upon the shore, I walked with Him at even
And I looked back upon the path wed trod
And in the sand I traced our way at even
And I was glad Id walked through life with God:
For side by side wed journeyed through together
All through the worlds wide wilderness of care
And side by side wed journeyed through to even:
Safe at his side the Lord my God had brought me here.

But in my joy I caught a strain of sadness
To give me pause when thinking of my way
For on the shore I saw hed left me lonely
When I had most the need of him to stay:
When I was tried hed left me worn and wandering,
Hed left me lone when I was fighting fears,
Hed let me tread the steepest slopes in solitude
Before he came back to my side to dry my tears.

But then the Lord drew near to me in comfort
And in his tenderness he made it plain
That in the times when dread and darkness threatened
He was my shield and shelter from the pain:
For on his shoulders he was gently bearing
And on his shoulders I from harm was free:
The single trace of footprints of the Master,
The single trace of footprints shows he carried me.

So on the shore I walk with Him at even;
I face the latter days of life secure,
For if my pilgrimage reserves me sorrow
The footprints show that He is strong and sure:
If I am near the gates of heaven weary,
No longer strong enough to stride alone
The footprints show that he is there to carry me:
The footprints show the Lord my God will bear me home

-Margaret Fishback Powers

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Yeah...Soo? biggrin.gif


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